Required: Post a comment about Hemingway. What did you learn from reading Hemingway?
Draft Three: Stream of Consciousness
1. Examine your flashbacks. Find moments where your character can include digressions, get stuck on topics, trail off, etc. You are trying to replicate or reproduce how the character’s mind works.
2. Write these flashbacks using stream of consciousness.
Draft Four: Sentence length
1. Keep your sentences short and declarative in your non-flashback section of the story. Remember dialogue sounds more realistic when you speak in short sentences or fragments.
2. In your flashback scenes, find moments where you digress and create long, complex sentences. Use em dashes to indicate digressions. Use semi colons ; to connect related clauses (but don't over use these). Use commas to make a simple sentence into a complex one. Use an ellipsis … to indicate trailing off. Use repetition of phrase to expand a comment.
Ex: “They knew who had shot their fathers, their relatives, their brothers, their friends…”;
Use conjunctions to add phrases to your independent clauses (and, or, but, etc.)
3. Try to find a rhythm in your writing. Most paragraphs start out with short sentences. This allows for a certain length of speed. Then as your sentences get longer and more complex, you can slow or speed the eye of the reader. Usually, you want important information to be delivered slowly. The use of repetition helps create a meter and rhythm for your sentence structure.
Try to stop at each draft # and save your work as that draft #. Turn in all four “drafts” of your story by the end of this week (Thursday, May 7).
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